I need some critique of small short fanfics i'm writting, fictional papers on equestria's creatures, magic and other stuff, anyone care to give me their honest thoughts?
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CSA-519-24
Canterlot 1330
Memorandum for: ██████████
Subject: Action to safeguard information regarding reality-bending abilities within artifacts and or individuals.
As noted in many discussions during the past several months, you and your department or agency have an obligation to safeguard records regarding reality-bending capabilities. Reality bending phenomena include:
Any and all individuals or artifacts capable of conjuring, summoning and or evoke artifacts and or individuals into this reality by using level V or higher methods of magical manipulation.
Any and all individuals or artifacts capable of affecting the space-time continuum regardless of magical manipulation level.
Any and all individuals or artifacts capable of physically interacting, communicating and or listening to other planes of existence, dimensions or realities.
Classified information, regardless of its age, that could reasonably be expected to assist in the development or use of reality-bending abilities, including information about the current locations of stockpiles of artifacts that could be exploited for use in such abilities should not be disclosed inappropriately.
I personally asked the Acting Director of the Information Security Office to prepare a guidance for reviewing information in your department or agency regarding reality bending. Their guidance is attached and it should be distributed to appropriate officials within your department or agency, together with this memorandum to assist in your undertaking an immediate re-examination of current measures for identifying and safeguarding all such information at your department or agency.
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Since its creation, the Equestrian school of magical affairs has divided magic into four categories in order to facilitate its study; Said categories encompass all the known methods of magical manipulation within Equestria, separated in four different fields and sorted by magical power:
I Passive manipulation of the body's bioelectricity.
II Active manipulation of the body's bioelectricity.
III Passive manipulation of mainstream sources of magic.
IV Active manipulation of mainstream sources of magic.
This division of magic as listed by the Equestrian school of magical affairs is known as the basis of magic, or “Mainstream” magic for short, encompassing direct or indirect manipulation of any energy source within our realm by direct or indirect means.
Advanced magical practise known as Category V or level V magical manipulation was discovered within the battle with the Chaos god Discord, forcing the creation of a new category, hidden from the public eye.
The fifth category of magic is characterized by the manipulation of dimensional energy, also known as “fourth wall manipulation”, “fourth wall breaching” or “breaking of the fourth wall” this effect takes place when an entity capable of exerting changes on higher dimensions does so with the purpose of altering ours.
Interrogation of Discord, the god of chaos, has provided little useful information about the nature of such mechanism, stating that the actual magic at play is as simple as a levitation spell.(1)
An experiment conducted under the supervision of Twilight Sparkle HRH has proven capable of altering an object’s size and mass by moving it on a fourth dimensional space using only mainstream magical manipulation methods.
While the study succeeded at proving that mainstream methods of magic can indeed affect the fourth layer, the required magical power for such operation vastly suppresses that of a single individual, requiring three alicorns in order to work. The procedure has been qualified too impractical outside of testing environment.(2)
Despite the improbability of a being from our realm to practice anything higher than level IV magical manipulation, equestrian history provides a record of a small number of artifacts and individuals capable of performing spells that would require level V magical manipulation.(3)
Theoretically, by the appliance of the law of truly large numbers, an individual with the ability to manipulate Level V magical fields deemed to be born at some point in time; A widely accepted theory within the scientific community for the origins of Discord.
At present, only two beings capable of interacting with the fourth dimension are known to exist within Equestria: Discord, the god of chaos and Pinkamena Diane Pie, current element of laughter.
Pinkamena is a normal looking earth pony born under a normal family in Rockville, Western Equestria. Sister of three and reportedly presenting no abnormalities during her childhood, how she acquired her powers is hitherto unknown.
When interrogated, Pinkamena provides no useful information regarding her abilities mechanism of work nor how she acquired them. Subject is capable of activating her powers willingly, stating, “it’s just like tracing back your steps”
Neurological scan of the subject on activation of her abilities under lab conditions is still pending.
Psychological evaluation of subject support the theory of erratic or instable behaviour and mental breakdowns as possible side effects of Level V magic manipulation.
References
1."Session II" Project brown noodle. 1340. Transcript.
2. Twilight S. HRH. Extending the reach of magical capabilities within an unicorn. 1343.
3. Sunny K, Shining Ice, Thunderhoof H, Velvet C. A comprehensive history of Equestria. 1330;1181–1438.
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Program
Session report
1. This report documents an audience with Pinkamena diane pie in compliance with a request from Priness Celestia QE. The purpose of this session was to provide information relevant to the manipulation of extra dimensional energy.
2. The subject’s responses are provided as raw intelligence data, as such have not been subjected to any intermediate analysis, evaluation or collation. Interpretation and use of the information provide is the responsibility of the requestor.
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RC: All right, pinkamena, I want you to relax and answer the following questions as detailed as possible. Let’s start with session 1.
PP: Please call me pinkie, all my friends call me pinkie.
Pause
RC: Okay. Let’s start with the questions.
Pause
RC: Can you pinpoint exactly when did you start presenting abnormal abilities?
PP: Abnormal, like what?
Pause
+05
RC: Your friends have reported you can slide upwards on a slide…How do you explain such ability?
PP: That?! Don’t be silly, you just slide down on it but instead of down you go up!
RC: When was the first time you realized that was an option?
PP: Like always I guess, I can’t recall an exact date.
RC: Do you remember your age at the time?
Pause
+07
PP: I was young, but already had my cutie mark.
RC: Alright, next question, can you give us an step-by-step explanation on how the process of sliding upwards on a slide takes place?
Pause
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RC: Pinkie, can you please answer the question?
PP: Sorry! Got distracted.
PP: Ok, alright I got it, you know that feeling when you lose something and just go back your steps all the way back to your room and the thing is lying on the floor? It’s the same thing, you just…Trace back your steps, like you just walked down all the way from your room so you know how to step to the front, all you have to do is take the same step but backwards.
RC: Okay. End of session.
[Read more] >>122512>Trace back your steps, like you just walked down all the way from your room so you know how to step to the front, all you have to do is take the same step but backwards.Of course! It's obvious now. Now it's time to go break reality by creating pinkie pony fingers with multiple limbs.
>>122511>>122512Ooh, I wonder if these revelations could lead the equestrian scientific community to completely change the way they think about magic!
>being able to slide upwards on a slidesounds like fuckery is happening in higher dimensions, a possible relation to the mechanics behind teleportation?
>>122568>I wonder if these revelations could lead the equestrian scientific community to completely change the way they think about magic!Hm, well without doubt the current revelations will help the scientific community to better understand how discord and pinkie work, but i can't say they will go far before they understand how a seemingly normal earth pony is capable of manipulating a higher dimension.
Maybe it is all within the subject's mind? Who knows, theories will flow like chocolate milk on the table.
>a possible relation to the mechanics behind teleportation?Hmm, well an unicorn does need to develop certain abilities before teleporting. Maybe, maybe it is certainly posible.
I could ask one of my sources for more information, of course an study on such complex issues might take him some time.
>>122577>ask one of my sources for more informationPlease do, I'm willing to wait for any amount of time necessary to find results, especially if a connection is found. Even if one isn't found, it's still a good idea to check!